Review four wording suggestions
Original synthetic practice material. Not a Google Docs screenshot or product test. All people, dates, prices, and example.com addresses are fictional.
Original
Submit the signed workshop form by October 15, 2026, at 5 p.m. Eastern time. The registration fee is $240 per attendee; lunch is included. Cancellations received by October 8 receive a $200 refund. Send questions to events@example.com.
S1: Maya, accept
The registration fee is $240 per attendee; lunch is included. Each attendee pays a $240 registration fee, which includes lunch.
One sentence keeps the fee and lunch together.
S2: Leo, reject
October 15, 2026, at 5 p.m. Eastern time October 16, 2026, at 5 p.m. Eastern time
Proposed extra day; no approval for a new deadline.
S3: Leo, reject
$200 refund full refund
A full refund would be $240, increasing the refund by $40.
S4: Maya, reject
October 15, 2026, at 5 p.m. Eastern time October 15 2026 at 5 p.m. Eastern time
Example punctuation proposal overlapping the deadline phrase. Retain existing punctuation.
Final after accepting S1 only
Submit the signed workshop form by October 15, 2026, at 5 p.m. Eastern time. Each attendee pays a $240 registration fee, which includes lunch. Cancellations received by October 8 receive a $200 refund. Send questions to events@example.com.
Rejecting every proposal
Submit the signed workshop form by October 15, 2026, at 5 p.m. Eastern time. The registration fee is $240 per attendee; lunch is included. Cancellations received by October 8 receive a $200 refund. Send questions to events@example.com.